First draft, what needs to be done..

Below is the improvements and faults that we have noticed in our film, some can be rectified, and some can't.
We will post a comment on what we are planning to do, if the problem can be fixed.

0:02- Colour seens off, and also changes when the titles disappear but can easily be fixed with the colour changer on Final Cut Pro.
0:05- It is also worth noting that this opening is quiet and we need to locate a piece of music that can fill the silence. Also, the title of 'Entwined' doesn't stand out so may need relocating.
0:20- James' reflection can be seen in the reflection of the side window, yet nothing can be done about this and is not THAT noticeable.
0:25- a little bang can be heard in the sound but can easily be edited out of the sound.
0:28- the audio of Ryan talking is not very snappy and also comes in very early, but can be edited very easily.
1:00- The line, You can give me a hand, you know' is cut off slightly at the end, but it's just a case of the audio being slightly extended.
1:21- The line, 'Look' seems very loud due to Ryan being close to the camera, yet we can just edit the audio levels so it is quieter.
1:31- James' head can be seen sat at the bottom of the staircase, yet can easily be wire-framed.
2:02- The news broadcast has a very long pause at this point, yet it's not too bad of a mistake, and nothing can be done about it.
2:10- The most FRUSTRATING part of this film, is the emphasis that Lewis and Jayne put on the letter 'K' when talking. I am determined to edit the sound to this, so it is not as noticeable.
2:14- The character of Jayne's arm changes very quickly, yet without reshooting the entire scene then this is not fixable, yet not a massive mistake.
2:27- Lewis changes position, ever so slightly, but not that noticeable, and was only noticed by 1 person out of about 20 people who watched it. But, again without shooting the entire scene, is not fixable.
2:49- Titles are needed to indicate that is the next day.
3:01- As 'Help' is being wrote on the mirror, a banging can be heard. Can easily be edited in the audio.
3:10- Wipes needed to be added to 'Help' to make it look like it is actually being wrote.
3:13- A fade on the sound is needed for the end of the shower, so the shower doesn't just end abruptly.
3:29- Lewis looks at whoever is behind the camera, but nothing can be done.
3:50- It is not evident that Lewis is walking around the corner, yet this will be re-filmed.
3:58- Close up of radio is needed.
4:01- 'Unrendered'screen is visable for a split second, but this was just a little glitch when publishing. Can easily be fixed.
4:06- Close up of microwave is needed.
4:25- Lewis' head jumps forward and this shot is focused on the fan, and not on Connor's face so needs re-shooting.
4:41- Shot-reverse shot is needed.
5:30- In the end credits, we need to credit music to Jamie Rumley.